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EPISODE 1 (pilot) Generalization:
Positive:
Good Opening Sequence x 2
Good establishing shots x 2
Good sound track
Milk shake shot good
Confident Characters
Well acted in places x 3
Good range of shots

Negative:
Tried way to hard to be funny
Girl isn't good actor
James way too extreme
Sound level not the same
Out side shot - flashback - needs to be clearer
Shots when characters look into camera don't work
Music cuts too quick
Way too long x 2
Too much swearing x 3
Not bleeped properly x 3
Alex's character changes too much
Shots look studenty
Should close up on cans
Too angry
Flashback too repetitive
Nobody does detention in a computer room
Characters kinda dull
Credits too fast
Door scene does not make sense x 2
Pier isn't french enough?
Too much fade out
Music too loud made them jump x 2
Unrealistic Characters


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Episode 2 Trapped generalization:
- Tries too hard to be funny, just makes it worse
- Keith totally unbelievable
- Alexander/James scene too long
- Script not quite tight enough, should be 'laugh every two seconds'
- Shots of Hayden don't flow x2